This week on the new hit abc drama. Also known as what my World lit teacher tells me what to do. Here is "metonomy"
When Pink walks down the hallway she knows she's the best.
Pink scoffs at weaker people, like Walmart or thrift.
Pink has high social status.
Most of the time pink doesn't even wear the color pink but there she is.
Pink is the name of her best friend, same with her other best friend.
She makes fun of old navy and khole.
She dates the quarterback of the football team, known as polo.
Pink doesn't do we'll in school,
Pink is mean
Pink thinks breast cancer is the largest human tragedy.
When thrift died from lung cancer she still had the other pinks raise menu for breast cancer. To her thrift's problems mean nothing.
Everything Pink owns is pink, from her socks to her backpack, why? Because its Pink. Pink pencil cases, Pink gym bags, Pink hairbands.
Pink doesn't work, she gets maintained.
Pink's father's name is J, or Mr. Crew. He works hard to keep Pink, he suffers for her, and for his wife Pink.
Pink's brother is named Fitch, he doesn't work either, why would he?
Pink drives an expensive car, one mr. Crew got her.
With such a life you wonder if she'll go to college, of course she will, J got her a ticket. She'll join a sorority and meet other pinks, and she'll end up getting a nursing job. Is this the end of pink? Gosh no, she'll get pink scrubs. And she'll marry a Polo or a Crew.
Don't worry about Pink. Because she won't worry about you.
When Pink walks down the hallway she knows she's the best.
Pink scoffs at weaker people, like Walmart or thrift.
Pink has high social status.
Most of the time pink doesn't even wear the color pink but there she is.
Pink is the name of her best friend, same with her other best friend.
She makes fun of old navy and khole.
She dates the quarterback of the football team, known as polo.
Pink doesn't do we'll in school,
Pink is mean
Pink thinks breast cancer is the largest human tragedy.
When thrift died from lung cancer she still had the other pinks raise menu for breast cancer. To her thrift's problems mean nothing.
Everything Pink owns is pink, from her socks to her backpack, why? Because its Pink. Pink pencil cases, Pink gym bags, Pink hairbands.
Pink doesn't work, she gets maintained.
Pink's father's name is J, or Mr. Crew. He works hard to keep Pink, he suffers for her, and for his wife Pink.
Pink's brother is named Fitch, he doesn't work either, why would he?
Pink drives an expensive car, one mr. Crew got her.
With such a life you wonder if she'll go to college, of course she will, J got her a ticket. She'll join a sorority and meet other pinks, and she'll end up getting a nursing job. Is this the end of pink? Gosh no, she'll get pink scrubs. And she'll marry a Polo or a Crew.
Don't worry about Pink. Because she won't worry about you.
Hey Chris,
ReplyDeleteI really liked the depth of the blog and especially the last sentence. You had voice and personality coming out in it, but not as much as your last one. The only problems really came in using metonymy in the anecdote as you were supposed to. Firstly, something has to happen for it to be more of an anecdote. You more or less just described Pink's life and her personality. It has to be about something happening, like the Burkas going in to the bazaar and following each other and buying something. That goes into the next criteria. You can't just come out and say what Pink is like and her personality. You lay down a short story, and describe pink by implying what she's like through metonymy. For example, "Pink strutted through the hall, nose in the air, with her perfect make-up and spot less clothes, her designer purse filled with her Dad's cash, and not a care in the world for you or anything else." But other than that it was nicely done. I liked your overall point on Pink and her life though. You just have to say it more subtly. :)
ah i can tell that you are talking about a preppy rich school girl that has the perfect life from only reading a few sentences. So i praise the fact that i was able to get and understand what you were talking about quickly and not get confused. A tip for you to make this even better in my opinion is that maybe you could try to connect everything and make this sound more like a story. Other than that you were very descriptive and I liked your Mentamony.
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